11月3日写作真题参考范文：让犯人接受教育是减少犯罪的很不错办法吗？

　　2018年11月3日雅思大作文题目

　　“　It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?　”

 

 

　　解析&审题

　　11月3日的考题与犯罪有关。犯罪题材一直都是雅思写作考试的重点之一，每年都会出现4-5次，请各位烤鸭务必重视这个题材。以往考过的犯罪题材包括犯罪的原因，如何减少犯罪，青少年犯罪的惩罚等。

 

　　本次涉及减少犯罪的办法。题目中提出一个观点，即加强犯人的教育，让他们出狱后能够找到工作，这就是减少犯罪的很不错办法。对这类“很不错办法”的题目，唐老师认为很不错的策略就是双边讨论，首先承认题目中提出的办法是有效的，然后再指出这个办法的缺陷，提出它应该不是很不错的办法，还存在其他更好的办法。本题提出加强犯人教育这个办法，其前提是很多犯人的教育水平很低。就本题而言，我们应该不会去反对这个前提，而是承认犯人的教育水平很低，并在此基础上讨论教育是不是很不错的办法。那么，我们首先承认教育可以帮助犯人出狱后找到好工作，然后提出，犯人能够找到好工作也不一定确保犯罪率降低。这样就否认了教育犯人是降低犯罪的The best办法。

 

　　以下是唐老师的高分范文，大家可认真阅读，看老师是如何把以上思路落实到具体文字表达的。

 

 

　　老师笔记

　　01

　　Because many inmates in prison do not have formal education and have not ever had a decent job before, it is believed that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them so they can findemployment after release. However, there are both good news and bad news about the value of prison education.

 

　　由于监狱中的许多囚犯没有受过正规教育，也从未有过体面的工作，因此人们认为减少犯罪的很不错办法是教育他们，使他们释放后能够找到工作。然而，监狱教育的价值既有也有坏消息。

 

　　解析

　　（1） 本段先重述题目观点，并给出自己的判断，表明接下来文章做双边讨论。

　　（2） inmate 监狱中的囚犯

　　（3） a decent job 一份体面的工作

　　（4） employment 工作；就业

　　（5） release 释放（n. & v.）

 

　　02

　　There is evidence that educating criminals in prison does work to some extent, for it can help them secure a good job after being set free and return to normal life as soon as possible. In looking across the related statistics, the chances of finding employment are about 10 percent higher among prisoners who haveparticipated in either academic or vocational education programs than those who have not. Education, therefore, remains an important means to ensure that inmates are prepared for the challenges in workplaces.

 

　　有证据表明，在监狱里教育罪犯在某种程度上是有效的，因为这可以帮助他们在获释后找到一份好工作，并尽快恢复正常生活。相关统计资料显示，参加过学术或职业教育项目的囚犯的就业机会比未参加的囚犯高出约10%。因此，教育一直都是确保囚犯为迎接工作场所的挑战做好准备的重要手段。

 

　　解析

　　（1） 本段主要论述监狱里的教育项目的确可以帮助罪犯出狱后找到工作。本段论述中使用的是数据法，也就是提供数据来支持自己的观点。

　　（2） evidence 证据

　　（3） secure 活得（v.）；安全的（adj.）

　　（4） statistics 数据

　　（5） participate in 参加

　　（6） vocational 职业的

　　（7） ensure 确保

 

　　03

　　However, skeptics claim that in practice education behind bars may be more a romantic idea than an effective solution to the growing crime rate. It must be made clear that the point is not against correctional education programs, considering that most criminals are under-educated. Rather, the point is that sometimes prison education produces nothing more than “better-educated criminals,” who may become even more dangerous. These days, the violent crime rate keeps soaring up, which is a clear indication that prison education is not really working well. The value of prison education, therefore, must not be over-exaggerated, though it does improve the prospect of employment for the former prisoners.

 

　　然而，怀疑论者声称，在实践中，监狱中的教育可能更多地是一个浪漫的想法，而不是一个不断上升犯罪率的解决办法。必须清楚地表明，这里并不是在反对补救性的教育项目，因为大多数罪犯受教育程度的确是很低的。这里的要点是，有时监狱教育只会产生“受过良好教育的罪犯”，他们可能变得更危险。最近，暴力犯罪率不断上升，这清楚地表明监狱教育并没有起到很大作用。因此，监狱教育的价值虽然这确实改善了前囚犯的就业前景，但不要过分夸大。

 

　　解析

　　（1） 本段主要论述监狱的教育并一定能降低犯罪率，反而可能让罪犯变得更加危险。

　　（2） skeptics 怀疑论者

　　（3） education behind bars 监狱里的教育

　　（4） crime rate 犯罪率

　　（5） correctional 补救性的

　　（6） soar up 快速上升

　　（7） exaggerate 夸张

　　（8） prospect 前景

 

　　04

　　To sum up, it pays to educate inmates and prepare them for job opportunities. Whether education in prisons is the best way to reduce crime depends on the way those inmates see the education they receive. Good things often happen, but probably not as often as justice officials hope.

　　总之，对囚犯进行教育并使他们为就业机会做好准备是值得的。监狱里的教育是不是减少犯罪的很不错方法，取决于囚犯们对教育的看法。好的结果经常发生，但可能不像司法官员所希望的那样频繁。

 

　　解析

　　（1） 总结前面的主要观点，包括监狱教育的好处和局限。

　　（2） it pays to do... 做......是值得的

　　（3） depend on 取决于

　　（4） justice official 司法官员

 

　　7分范文

　　

　　Because many inmates in prison do not have formal education and have not ever had a decent job before, it is believed that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them so they can find employment after release. However, there are both good news and bad news about the value of prison education.

　　There is evidence that educating criminals in prison does work to some extent, for it can help them secure a good job after being set free and return to normal life as soon as possible. In looking across the related statistics, the chances of finding employment are about 10 percent higher among prisoners who have participated in either academic or vocational education programs than those who have not. Education, therefore, remains an important means to ensure that inmates are prepared for the challenges in workplaces.

　　However, skeptics claim that in practice education behind bars may be more a romantic idea than an effective solution to the growing crime rate. It must be made clear that the point is not against correctional education programs, considering that most criminals are under-educated. Rather, the point is that sometimes prison education produces nothing more than “better-educated criminals,” who may become even more dangerous. These days, the violent crime rate keeps soaring up, which is a clear indication that prison education is not really working well. The value of prison education, therefore, must not be over-exaggerated, though it does improve the prospect of employment for the former prisoners.

　　To sum up, it pays to educate inmates and prepare them for job opportunities. Whether education in prisons is the best way to reduce crime depends on the way those inmates see the education they receive. Good things often happen, but probably not as often as justice officials hope.

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　　建议背诵的句子

　　1. Because many inmates in prison do not have formal education and have not ever had a decent job before, it is believed that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them so they can findemployment after release.

　　由于监狱中的许多囚犯没有受过正规教育，也从未有过体面的工作，因此人们认为减少犯罪的很不错办法是教育他们，使他们释放后能够找到工作。

 

　　2. There is evidence that educating criminals in prison does work to some extent, for it can help them secure a good job after being set free and return to normal life as soon as possible.

　　有证据表明，在监狱里教育罪犯在某种程度上是有效的，因为这可以帮助他们在获释后找到一份好工作，并尽快恢复正常生活。

 

　　3. However, skeptics claim that in practice education behind bars may be more a romantic idea than an effective solution to the growing crime rate.

　　然而，怀疑论者声称，在实践中，监狱中的教育可能更多地是一个浪漫的想法，而不是一个不断上升犯罪率的解决办法。

 

　　4. However, skeptics claim that in practice education behind bars may be more a romantic idea than an effective solution to the growing crime rate.

　　然而，怀疑论者声称，在实践中，监狱中的教育可能更多地是一个浪漫的想法，而不是一个不断上升犯罪率的解决办法。

 

　　5. These days, the violent crime rate keeps soaring up, which is a clear indication that prison education is not really working well.

　　最近，暴力犯罪率不断上升，这清楚地表明监狱教育并没有起到很大作用。

 

　　6. Whether education in prisons is the best way to reduce crimedepends on the way those inmates see the education they receive.

　　监狱里的教育是不是减少犯罪的很不错方法，取决于囚犯们对教育的看法。

 

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