2月14日雅思大作文真题参考范文

　　2018年2月14日

　　雅思大作文题目

　　新技术改变了孩子们的玩耍方式，这是好还是坏？

　　“New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?”

　　

 

　　解析&审题

　　本题中有三个关键词，即new technologies, children, spend their free time，要求讨论“新技术改变了孩子们玩耍的方式，这是好还是坏？”在构思本题的时候，我们首先需要说清楚的是：哪些新技术？怎么样改变了孩子们玩耍的方式？然后讨论这种改变是好还是坏。当然，我们也要提醒自己，本题的重点是讨论“这种改变是好还是坏？”

　　说到“新技术”，我们立马会想到电脑，网络，智能手机。雅思考试写作经常要求考生讨论这样的题目“有了新技术，人们是否还需要去博物馆，去上学，去图书馆，去公司上班”，这是要求考生讨论新技术给人们的学习和生活带来的影响。本题其实与这些题目是异曲同工的：有了新技术，孩子们怎么玩耍？

　　那么，新技术如何改变孩子们玩耍的方式呢？我们需要提炼出2-3个“玩耍新方式”，在接下来重点讨论起优劣势的时候才能有基础。这里其实涉及到一个比较的问题。没有新技术的时候，孩子们一般喜欢在一起做各种游戏，或者安静地阅读，而网络手机的广泛使用，则让孩子们整天独自打电子游戏，或者浏览各种社交媒体信息。于是，我们可以归纳出新技术给孩子玩耍方式造成的两个影响：（1）从真实的集体游戏转变为虚拟的网上游戏；（2）从阅读书籍到紧盯手机或电脑。

　　这样，我们接下来的讨论就相对容易了。我们可以讨论这种变化的消极影响：首先，紧盯手机和电脑会给孩子的身体带来不良影响（数据表明，中小学生近视的比例已经达到惊人的70%），其次，过多沉浸在虚拟世界容易让孩子们产生孤独感，失去解决真实世界中各种问题的能力（比如人际交往能力，领导能力等）。

　　这样写，大家是否觉得思路是很清晰的？接下来，请大家阅读唐老师的高分范文，看以上思路是如何具体反映到字里行间的。

 

　　老师笔记

　　01

　　The widespread use of new technologies such as the Internet, computers, and smart phones has fundamentally changed the way children spend their free time. In the past, most children would engage in outdoor activities such as hiking, playing hide-and-seek, flying kites, to name only a few. Those who enjoyed reading for pleasure would stay indoors and read print books such as classical novels, children’s stories, and comic books. The situation is quite different now. The great majority of children today spend their spare time online, playing video games, listening to music, and browsing around in the social media of all kinds. In my view, this new development has more downside risks.

　　互联网、电脑和智能手机等新技术的广泛应用，从根本上改变了儿童利用空闲时间的方式。在过去，大多数儿童都会从事户外活动，如远足，玩捉迷藏，放风筝，等等。那些喜欢读书的人会待在家里，读一些印刷书籍，如经典小说，儿童故事和漫画书。现在情况完全不同了。今天，绝大多数孩子都把业余时间花在网上，玩电子游戏，听音乐，在各种社交媒体上闲逛。在我看来，这一新趋势有更多不利的风险。

　　解析

　　（1） 本段讨论新技术如何改变了儿童利用空闲时间的方式。本段采用的是比较法：过去......，而现在......。

　　（2） widespread 广泛的

　　（3） fundamentally 从根本上地

　　（4） engage in 从事

　　（5） to name only a few 仅举几个例子；诸如此类；等等

　　（6） the great majority of... 绝大多数的......

　　（7） browse around 四处闲看

　　（8） downside risks 不利的风险

 

　　02

　　Though it does make children’s life more interesting, and help them obtain information in a faster and more convenient way, the Internet also makes children easily addicted to it. The violent gun-fighting games, for example,appeal to children so much that some of them will spend hours and hours playing them. The cost is really high. The children’s performance at school becomes worse and worse, and their health also suffers. A recent study indicates that globally, the Internet games are responsible for 70% middle school students who are shortsighted.

　　虽然互联网确实使儿童的生活更有趣，并帮助他们以更快和更方便的方式获取信息，但互联网也使孩子们很容易对它上瘾。比如暴力枪战游戏对孩子们有很大的吸引力，以至于他们中的一些人会几个小时几个小时地玩这些游戏。这样做的成本真的很高。孩子们在学校的表现越来越差，而且健康也受到损害。最近的一项研究表明，在全球范围内，网络游戏造成70%的中学生近视。

　　解析

　　（1） 本段论述把时间花在网络游戏上的The first种坏处：学习和身体受损。论述方法包括举例和引用研究数据。

　　（2） be addicted to... 沉迷于......

　　（3） appeal to... 吸引

　　（4） globally 全球范围内

　　（5） be responsible for... 为......负责；导致......

 

　　03

　　Worse still, too much time spent facing the computer or smart phone mayresult in children’s isolation from the actual world. In the traditional games, children could learn the skills to work with others, lead a team, and create new things. All these skills are helpful for children to maintain their interpersonal relations when they grow up. But children can never develop these important skills by hiding behind the virtual Internet world without interactions with real people.

　　更糟糕的是，花太多时间面对电脑或智能手机可能会导致孩子们与现实世界隔绝。在传统的游戏中，孩子们可以学习各种技能：与他人合作，领导团队，创造新事物。所有这些技能都有助于孩子长大后维持人际关系。但是如果躲在虚拟的互联网世界后面，不与真实的人互动，孩子们永远也不能培养这些重要的技能。

　　解析

　　（1）本段从更深的层面讨论花太多时间在网络上的坏处：导致隔绝，无法培养人际交往能力。

　　（2）result in... 导致

　　（3）isolation 隔绝；疏离

　　（4）interpersonal relations 人际关系

　　（5）virtual 虚拟的

 

　　04

　　To conclude, new technologies have changed the way children spend their free time from outdoor activities to passive indoor Internet surfing. This may be beneficial to a certain extent, but generally it is a change for the worse.

　　总之，新技术已经改变了孩子们利用空闲时间的方式，从户外活动转变为被动的室内网络冲浪。这可能在一定程度上是有益的，但是总体上看，这个变化是更糟了。

　　解析

　　（1）本段是结论，明确提出自己的观点。

　　（2）passive 被动的

　　（3）to a certain extent 在某种程度上

　　（4）a change for the worse 一个糟糕的变化

 

 

　　7分范文

　　The widespread use of new technologies such as the Internet, computers, and smart phones has fundamentally changed the way children spend their free time. In the past, most children would engage in outdoor activities such as hiking, playing hide-and-seek, flying kites, to name only a few. Those who enjoyed reading for pleasure would stay indoors and read print books such as classical novels, children’s stories, and comic books. The situation is quite different now. The great majority of children today spend their spare time online, playing video games, listening to music, and browsing around in the social media of all kinds. In my view, this new development has more downside risks.

　　Though it does make children’s life more interesting, and help them obtain information in a faster and more convenient way, the Internet also makes children easily addicted to it. The violent gun-fighting games, for example, appeal to children so much that some of them will spend hours and hours playing them. The cost is really high. The children’s performance at school becomes worse and worse, and their health also suffers. A recent study indicates that globally, the Internet games are responsible for 70% middle school students who are shortsighted.

　　Worse still, too much time spent facing the computer or smart phone may result in children’s isolation from the actual world. In the traditional games, children could learn the skills to work with others, lead a team, and create new things. All these skills are helpful for children to maintain their interpersonal relations when they grow up. But children can never develop these important skills by hiding behind the virtual Internet world without interactions with real people.

　　To conclude, new technologies have changed the way children spend their free time from outdoor activities to passive indoor Internet surfing. This may be beneficial to a certain extent, but generally it is a change for the worse.

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　　建议背诵的句子

　　1. The widespread use of new technologies such as the Internet, computers, and smart phones has fundamentally changed the way children spend their free time.

　　互联网、电脑和智能手机等新技术的广泛应用，从根本上改变了儿童利用空闲时间的方式。

　　2. The great majority of children today spend their spare time online, playing video games, listening to music, and browsing around in the social media of all kinds.

　　今天，绝大多数孩子都把业余时间花在网上，玩电子游戏，听音乐，在各种社交媒体上闲逛。

　　3. Though it does make children’s life more interesting, and help them obtain information in a faster and more convenient way, the Internet also makes children easily addicted to it.

　　虽然互联网确实使儿童的生活更有趣，并帮助他们以更快和更方便的方式获取信息，但互联网也使孩子们很容易对它上瘾。

　　4. A recent study indicates that globally, the Internet games are responsible for 70% middle school students who are shortsighted.

　　最近的一项研究表明，在全球范围内，网络游戏造成70%的中学生近视。

　　5. Children can never develop these important skills by hiding behind thevirtual Internet world without interactions with real people.

　　如果躲在虚拟的互联网世界后面，不与真实的人互动，孩子们永远也不能培养这些重要的技能。