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　　More and more companies are allowing their employees to work at home, known as telecommuting. Is this a positive or negative development?

　　With the cutting-edge technologies progressing at a rapid pace, amounting number of companies allow their staff to telecommute. Personally, this trend is quite detrimental to both employers and employees, despite several benefits.

　　鉴于前文的进展很快，为了好的CC，这里让步的主旨句就可以被直接省略；笔触快，接好上段的尾巴➝ Of the many advantages, the most conspicuousone is that such practice can provide much convenience for employees. ➝ More precisely, with such policy implemented, no longer need commuters travel long distances, thus saving much time and energy that should have been wasted during traveling. / Besides, the rents and daily expenditure can be spared and instead allocated to other indispensable fields for the sound operation of the enterprise.

　　主旨句总写一句坏处更多，就是套路 However, it is quite a superficialview to completely ignore the according detriments.然后纵向展开是哪些detriments ➝To commence, such working mode can possiblydiminish workers’ working efficiency and overall productivity. This is mainly because those people who can easily be immersed in a familiar and cozy atmosphere but lack self-discipline tend to become less productive. By stark contrast, when exposed to theworkplace where the supervision from leaders and pressure from counterparts can act as motivation, employees usually perform their tasks efficiently. In this sense, hardly can their working efficiency and productivity be well guaranteed when tele-commuting. /Additionally, if there are no brick-and-mortar buildings and offices, employees working separately online are totally devoid ofthe chance to socialize with people face to face. ➝ 好的CC要求不赘述，信息涵义顶着写：这里的this就是前面句子铺垫出来的情况 This exerts a negative influence on both employees’ mentality and company’scultural cohesion, further hindering the sound development of the whole business.

　　In light of all the cases above, I firmly reckon that the upsides, 注意对比对象的一致性，好处就只能与坏处比 compared with the downsides, are far overshadowed.

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