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3分钟学会一个雅思7分句系列(二十)

新航道
2020-06-03 10:48:23

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An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. what are the reasons for this? Does it have a positive or negative development for society?


这个题目



学生在主体某段落的句写道:


If one employee quits his current job and opts for another one, the company needs to waste substantial time to recruit another employee and spend money on training staff.


* the company是哪个company啊?看完这个句子,读者知道看来是离职雇员离开的公司,但是这个定冠词还是有些突然了。


* waste substantial time,怎么就是waste了呢,用词的评价性可不能随便。


* another employee一定有更好的词。


* 前面是recruit another employee,后面是training staff。不对等不匹配呀。


* 最重点的来了:if引导的状语从句措辞和句子结构复杂了。


* spend time to do something不是用法习惯。


看下面

教师修改意见:


When an employee leaves a company, the company may need to spend quite a lot of time recruiting a replacement and money on training the replacement.


* 解决了上面评价时提到的所有问题。



小总结:


* 用词的评价性可不能随便。

* 措辞的“减法”(简洁/简化)是提升的关键。


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